Changes to my original Draft

*Changes made to my original draft include:  revision over grammar and added commentary

*Form of support: Sharing essay with adult.  This method proves to be the best because it allows your work to be edited by someone with more experience.  This may not be the case when having your work viewed by a peer

*Process to improving my work is through practice.  I believe that there is a huge margin for improvement by writing more frequently.

*Areas for improvement:  An area that I can improve on is grammar and sentence fluency.  My goal for the year is reducing my grammar mistakes per page to three.